Episode 1. The Elimination Notice

Eden received the message from his own number the night before monthly evaluation.

Tomorrow at 7:43 p.m., you fail. Reason: your breath comes late on the third beat.

He thought it was a prank until he saw the attachment. It was the evaluation order sheet, a file the trainees were not supposed to receive until morning. Eden's name sat second from the bottom. In the judges' memo field, one sentence waited in clean gray text: delayed breathing on third beat.

He practiced until dawn. To avoid breathing late on the third beat, he swallowed air on the second beat instead. At 4:02 a.m., his phone lit again.

UPDATED.

Tomorrow at 7:43 p.m., you fail. Reason: visible tension on the second beat.

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